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Raindrops.

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Forever.

He said.

We'd last.
United as waters converging as one.

Dissonance-

Water bodies. Crashing against the shore-
Rain. Crashing onto the Earth's surface-
Raindrops. Sliding off cold, hard surfaces-

Breaking off.

Forever...
Insincere, superficial beings.
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SameSkye's avatar
I love the line, "United as waters converging as one." It's an intruiging metaphor.

The short, staccato lines really emphasis how the narrator feels detached after the break-up. I like it.